User:Carbyb/Queen bee syndrome/Celinebean2000 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Carbyb


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Carbyb/Queen bee syndrome


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Queen bee syndrome

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Hi Carrie, here is some feedback for your article. I thought your revisions were very thorough and you did a great job paraphrasing instead of dropping in a lot of quotes. I think some parts could come off as biased and if possible could include more statistics or data for certain claims.


 * "In adolescence" section should have more citations
 * I think the "Notable cases" section is very important and informative for examples of the queen bee syndrome and would be great if you added more to it.