User:Careena.El-Khatib/Food security/Sion00 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (Careena.El-Khatib)
 * Link to draft you're reviewing:

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Lead evaluation
Once again this does not apply to you.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Content evaluation
The content is relevant and very up to date. I would say that a little more information could be useful. Breaking down how exactly Portugal combated food security, such as expanding on this: "ReFood Movement, a food waste prevention initiative, and the Municipal Plan Against Food Wastage program".

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Tone and balance evaluation
The way you talk about what Portugal has done is not neutral. You use too many adjectives. Saying 'inspiring' and 'motivates' makes it biased towards what portugal is doing. While what portugal has done is great and amazing you have to just talk about the facts without trying to make it sound nice or persuade the reader to agree with you. Allow the facts and examples of what portugal did to speak for itself.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Sources and references evaluation
Once again your sources are great you just have to put them at the end of your sentences where you used them. On mine I have the citations at the ends of my sentences so you can look at mine if you need help or you can send me an email and I can try to explain it for you.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Organization evaluation
The way you present the information is well organized. I think you could even do two paragraphs on it. The first could be about the financial crisis and how exactly portugal was able to be sustainable and decrease food insecurity and then the second could be about the award that portugal won and how portugal is leading the way.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

Images and media evaluation
I do not believe your topic needs any images.

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

Overall evaluation
I think the information you are adding to this article is really good and relevant. I would say it is a bit biased so you should just work on getting rid of adjectives and then just explaining more what Portugal actually did to increase food security and also sustainability. Also the title of your subsection could be 'By Portugal' because the section already has titles such as 'by the UN'. Good Job though! The topic is so interesting and important and portugal is one of my favorite countries in the world!