User:Carlahelou/Experiential education/Degenag Peer Review

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Carlahelou
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The lead of the article is informative and concise. It has a great opening that introduces the reader to the topic and defines what experiental learning is by definition. I felt the opening was strong and helped the reader with reliable sources. The opening does have a link to The Association to Experiental Education that gives information about the promotion of this type of learning.

After the opening there is a jump to a great deal about John Dewey which at first glance was very helpful, but it did seem to go on in great detail about his life beyond his connection to experiental education. If the topic was meant to be stayed in sharp focus - more information about this individual would be best in its own page/link for further information. Some of the links to define the pieces may not be necessary - for example a link to radical democracy or praxis. It would have been good to link perhaps some of Dewey's own articles or one article that references who he was or his research.

The practice entry was also informative - all of the suggested activities were excellent. The links provided however are general links to what each of these activities are. If we are saying these activities are indeed a part of exper. learning I would like to see an article about that type of education listing suggesting activities. What was the source of these activities?

The examples portion is where I got a little lost. For example: When talking about the quote on journals the link for the author  Lucy Calkins takes you to an audio book. I am also trying to determine how these pieces link direct experience that is stated in the lead to how journaling work with this type of learning. The two paragraphs here lean heavily into what journaling is but don't link how information is directly infused from a teacher to student via journaling. It may be good to focus in on that particular link and remove some of the definitional pieces that lead the reader astray. Then jumping to studies of this learning appears not to really link in synch and flow to the beginning.

The ending piece on roles begins very strong but I felt as I read it that I was lost in a lot of content that could be better summarized and shortened. Examples that make the links that allow the reader information to support the claim that this learning does what we hope to accomplish with shorter summaries of the examples. Links to Project Adventure go to another Wiki page and may be better to link to the actual site in lieu of Wiki.

Over all this was a great article with the largest issue being more information in some areas than needed and stronger links to some of the activities and authors.