User:Carlahelou/Experiential education/Slk333 Peer Review

General info
User: Carlahelou
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 * User:Carlahelou/Experiential education:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Experiential education

Lead
I believe the lead still needs work to reflect new content you have added or new content you plan to add to the article. ''The introductory sentence has remained unchanged. That is likely because it already concisely and clearly describes the article's topic. I agree with keeping it as it is. The lead of the article does not include a brief description of the article's major sections. This may be something to consider. The lead does not include information that is not present in the article- which is good! While the Lead is concise, I would recommend removing the direct quote from the "Association of Experiential Education", as direct quotes are not recommended on Wikipedia. I think there is room to add a little more to the lead of this article.''

Content
''The John Dewey section of the article seems valuable, but is kind of random right after the lead. I would recommend possibly changing the placement of this section so that the article flows better. I believe the paragraph about Dewey's influence of other models is not relevant to the topic of the article.''

''The Examples section of the article also seems valuable, but is missing explicit connections as to how it relates to experiential learning. I am unsure how journaling directly relates to the topic. Connections would be valuable here. I see that you are also considering removing many sentences from the article. I agree that they seem irrelevant, but what will they be replaced with?''

''The Change in Roles and Structures section of the article is very relevant. Perhaps the strongest section of the article. I think the placement of this section should follow the Lead section.''

''I don't see much in the article that deals with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps. Perhaps you can add content that will address topics related to historically underrepresented populations.''

The content seems up-to-date in the Development in Asian Countries, however, it appears you would like to remove that, so previous content will need to be up-to-date.

Tone and Balance
The tone of the article is generally neutral, however there are some statements that may be biased.

Sources and References
The statement "It is perceived that students learn more by being active" should be removed from the article, as it is making an assumption, is not cited, and is unclear on who is perceiving students in this way.

''The majority of sources in this article are not current. The most recent source is from 2012, but is not used for the majority of information. Most content is cited from sources dating back to the 1990's. What sources do you plan to add along with new content?''

Organization
''Your sandbox article does not have any grammatical or spelling errors. It is well written in a professional manner. I would reorganize sections, remove unnecessary content and replace with up-to-date content/sources surrounding the topic.''

Images and Media
''It does not appear that you have added any images or media to the article. This could be valuable.''

~ Stephanie Kubu