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I. Lead Section

The Elisabeth Van Dyck Commando was a branch of French militant group Action Directe that assassinated French Army General René Audran, on 25 January 1985. He was the Director of International Affairs (DAI) at the General Delegation for Armament (DGA). The team was named to commemorate Red Army Faction member Elisabeth Van Dyck.

'''II. History'''

The Elisabeth Van Dyck Commando was originally named after a second-generation RAF (Red Army Faction) member, Elisabeth von Dyck. This commando was created as a combined extension of both the Action Directe (AD) and the Red Army Faction (RAF). The AD appeared to take care of the organizational side of this commando, and so naming it after a memorialized member of the RAF makes sense if they were seeking to at least publicly have a unified front. Both the RAF and the AD were actively pursuing their shared goal of political autonomy within their home countries, respectively with the RAF being based in Germany and the AD being based in France. These groups' goal of political autonomy did not stop with their own countries however, and they often fought against their own countries' governments in the pursuit of political autonomy, or political freedom, for the world's working class.

'''III. Claimed Attacks'''

This commando had only one claimed attack, the assassination of French Army General René Audran on January 25, 1985. At the time of his death, Audran was a senior-level official in the French Ministry of Defense--specifically the Corps of Armament. The Elisabeth van Dyck Commando took credit for the assassination via letter. In the letter the members explained that they had killed Audran because he was the head of French's foreign arms sales and they believed that his "military and economic function is at the heart of the strategic imperialist project". The "project" being referred to is what the AD and RAF believed to be NATO and it's supporting European countries' goal of homogenizing the world into a capitalist culture, and that as they progressed along this goal it would widen the gap in power and money between the upper class and working class.

'''IV. External Links'''

https://socialhistoryportal.org/sites/default/files/raf/0319850125_0.pdf

https://books.google.com/books?id=yLH0BgAAQBAJ&pg=PA232&hl=en#v=onepage&q&f=false

https://www.telegraph.co.uk/news/worldnews/europe/france/3119083/Terrorist-group-Action-Directe-founder-does-not-regret-murders.html

Terrorist incidents attributed to the [Elisabeth von Dyck Commando] in the Global Terrorism Database (GTD)


 * 1) "Action Directe" July 2018.  Retrieved 10 May 2019. (The commando's one attack is listed under Action Directe in GTD.

→ Adjustments The article overall is well written; there are no spelling or grammar mistakes. A few changes could be made dealing with paragraph placement and some information that could be added to some paragraphs. These changes would make the article a smoother read for the readers. In the lead section area, the fourth paragraph would be better positioned between the first and second paragraph. The reasons for these suggestions are the following. The main is the first paragraph talks about the two groups RAF (Red Army Faction) and French Action Directe joining forces for a few years. Thus creating a joint group out of common goals, which leads to the question – what were the common goals. Yet the answer is not addressed until alter down in paragraph four after a new subject has been brought up. If you move the fourth paragraph up so it is between the first and second paragraph, the question in the first paragraph can be answered, in the new second paragraph. It also creates a smooth transition into the old seconded paragraph that addresses the name of the group and the reason behind the choice in their name choice. This paragraph might want to mention the other reason why they name groups after members since you mention that there are other reasons why they do that. I think that you should also know that first of your references does not work. When the readers go to the site, they are told that they do not have access to read the information on the site. Snark1234 (talk) 04:16, 30 April 2019 (UTC)Snark1234