User:Carlmo1357/Mothers' rights/Happyhelper775 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Carlmo1357


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Carlmo1357/Mothers%27_rights?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mothers Right's

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Molly! I think you have a great topic that is large enough that you have plenty to write about. While reviewing what you have written for this article I made some slight changes to some weirdly worded sentences as well as fix the occasional spelling error. The biggest thing that I noticed is the you bounce around between information on the unites states and other countries in the Labor rights section that makes it kind of confusing to follow. I think it might help to reformat that section by breaking down the different rights and giving examples by place or by discuss specifically the united states and at the end make comparisons to other countries. Either way would be fine but this section seems like a cluster of thoughts that bounce around too much to flow nicely. The Breast feeding section flows better but could benefit from reordering some information. Lastly you added the family rights section but didn't include any sources for the information you have. I assumed this was because that section is still in progress but it still could use some references to the statements made. Great topic though, I would have loved to choose this topic and find that maternity rights are a great topic to inform people on.