User:Carloslittle885/Marketing Strategies/Michealjordan45 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Carloslittle885


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Carloslittle885/Marketing Strategies
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Marketing strategy

Evaluate the drafted changes
First, I think that you have a good plan and lay out for what you plan on doing. You said you had a good definition of segmentation but I do not know what the definition is. Also, you said you want to make the history portion of the article in sentence form to bullet point forms. As someone who knows nothing about marketing I still do not know much about marketing. I see some of your sources and references are from published books. Using books as a reference is good because it is validated and reliable but no one else can access them without purchasing the book. I would try and citing all of your sources better it is hard trying to find them. Some I could not find at all. If it is a website you can just copy and paste the links to sandbox it would be much easier getting to them. I am not sure if you plan on adding the sentence "Marketing strategies are best helpful for persuading when you are trying to get content out to people who need it or people who want it." I think this sentence would be a good sentence to add to the beginning of the article.