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Proposed Contribution Tar Beach

As spoken by Faith Ringgold in an interview with cultural critic Michele Wallace, Tar Beach was not written for children but rather to recall the essence of childhood and invoke the memories associate with it.

Genre
Tar Beach 's unique representation of a story quilt was heralded by Rudine Sims as innovative for existing as an interesting intersection between autobiography, history, and fantasy.

Article Evaluation Drama


 * Is anything missing that could be added?
 * The article mentions that the art style is a combination of manga and comics. This could be expanded on to describe which components of the graphic novel are from each genre, and how the components tie into the portrayal of the characters.
 * A snippet that may help the reader understand the themes concerning masculinity could be added to the section in which the article talks about the van ride with Callie and Justin and Jesse's father in which Justin tells Callie that his father suspects that he is gay. This may provide context for why Justin is encouraged by his father to pursue theatre in high school while Jesse is expected to go back to studying.
 * Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * The source that is used to provide the themes of the book by Berland work and support the article. The source is cited after all points made concerning the themes of masculinity and the concept of "coming out."

Article Evaluation Leonard Peltier

I couldn't remember all of the italicized questions from the slide that were supposed to be included and I hadn't previously finished the other article evaluation, so I am basing my evaluation off of Wikipedia's final review checklist.


 * Is anything missing that could be added?
 * The article could include the viewpoints of AIM and the traditional tribal leaders. It may be relevant to understand the ideologies behind the conflict and would tell us more of what Peltier was fighting for or against.
 * The article could also mention that Peltier published a book about his imprisonment, and that he is maintaining activism in incarceration.
 * The article is also missing some citations needed to justify some of the claims about the trial and Peltier's background. Some of these I was able to find.
 * Does the lead section describe the article efficiently?
 * The lead section offers some background information on Peltier, states that the main controversy in the article is the Pine Ridge Shootout, and finally describes the current position of Leonard Peltier and his case. It summarizes the sections of the article and while it does not go into detail about the controversy, it efficiently conveys that the shootout is a vital element to the article.
 * Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * The links do work, and the talk page indicates that faulty links have been made compatible and are actively being corrected.
 * Does the format of the article follow the guidelines of Wikipedia? Is the format able to be easily followed?
 * The format is easy to follow. The article contains correct punctuation and grammatical errors are at a minimum. Each of the sections only contains relevant information. The article is not filled with quotations, but does contain some that describe the perspectives of characters in the controversy and Peltier's life. However, the section "Other Developments" should be labeled chronologically to show a timeline of what has transpired after the Pine Ridge Shootout.
 * Are all sources cited?
 * No controversial claims are made without appropriate sources being cited.
 * Is the article written from a neutral perspective?


 * The language in the article mostly steers clear of persuasion, but because the article is centered around a controversy the viewpoints of each side of the argument contain persuasive elements.

Article Evaluation of Slavery in the Spanish New World colonies


 * Is anything missing that could be added?
 * A section that discusses slave resistance in the colonies could help reallocate some of the information presented in the lead section.
 * Another relevant section that could be added is a section that discusses the forum that slavery in the New World created for human rights. Parts of the article mention the importance of slavery to human rights, but a designated section may make the formatting of the article more clear.
 * The sentence that describes the Asiento and the importance of it to the slave trade of Africans should be moved from its position in the lead section to the section under Spanish Enslavement of Africans.
 * There are numerous places where citations are needed to support the claims made in the article
 * Is everything in the article relevant?
 * Parts of the lead section are not relevant to their placement in the article. There are facts that are presented in the lead section that would be better placed in another part of the article or that should be omitted because of their lack of a strong connection to the rest of the article.
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any viewpoints that are persuasive or heavily biased?
 * The article is mostly neutral. There are some examples of opinion centered language, such as calling some of the acts of slavery in the article, "egregious."
 * Do the links work?
 * The article is filled with links to other pages, and the majority of the links work. Also, the majority of the links connect to key vocabulary in the article or are links that offer clarification to the meaning of the terms.
 * What else could be improved?
 * The lead section is almost as long as some of the sections. Parts of the lead section could probably be moved to other sections of the article or summarized so that it is a more concise introduction to the topic.

Does the Wrinkle in Time (novel) page follow the structure Wikipedia suggests?


 * The lead section is extremely short, and does not include an introduction to the novel itself, it only states the awards the book has won and its movie adaptations. The lead section should be comprised of a summary of the plot and characters of the book and an outline of the article itself, and the awards and adaptations should be moved into a later section.
 * The article is missing a background section, but most of the information that would comprise that section is located in the "Publication History" section which describes the social atmosphere in which the book was created.
 * The article summary is complete and provides a description of the plot. The length of the summary includes all of the major events and goes into detail about most of them. The plot summary section could be condensed by eliminating sentences unnecessary to the reader's understanding of the plot or themes. The article also provides a character summary, and is much too thorough. The summary includes Mrs. Buncombe and Mr. Jenkins, characters nonessential to the plot or themes of the novel.
 * The article makes reference that the novel is a science fantasy novel, but does not have a genre section. This could be remedied by explaining more about the genre of the book in the "Major themes" section of the "Reception" section.
 * The article does not contain an "Analysis" section, but elements of the anaylsis section are present in the articles section on its publication history.
 * Source: Credo Reference: The Cambridge Guide to Children's books in English.
 * Ang, S. (2001). Wrinkle in time, a (1962). In V. Watson (Ed.), The Cambridge guide to children's books in English. Cambridge, UK: Cambridge University Press. Retrieved from https://proxy.library.georgetown.edu/login?url=https://search.credoreference.com/content/entry/childbooks/wrinkle_in_time_a_1962/0?institutionId=702

Article Evaluation Persepolis


 * Is anything missing that could be added?
 * The character section on Reza is very small considering how important a role he plays in uncovering Marji's identity and desires. He plays a larger emotional role in Marji's life than just a husband for two years.
 * A paragraph should be added to the background section that would provide historical context for the Islamic Revolution. A little bit more information may help to illuminate the cultural context that the autobiography is placed in.
 * Considering that it is a graphic novel, I feel like there should be more pictures of the text. The article discusses "visual literacy" but providing examples from the graphic novel would also help to emphasize the effects that the duality of images and words have on illustrating the cultural themes to the reader. I think it is especially important for this article to have pictures to supplement the text because the pictures would be examples of the comparison between western styles and eastern content.
 * Is everything in the article relevant?
 * The summary sections are too long. They offer summaries of every chapter instead of a more concise summary of the each volume.
 * Some of the characters in the section are also described in detail despite being mostly irrelevant to the plot. For example, Uncle Taher and Khosroj have two of the longest character sections in the article, but are only included in one chapter of the entire novel and their affects on Marji are not as profound as some of the other character's who are elaborated on considerably less.
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any biased viewpoints?
 * The article is mostly neutral. It does not delve deeply into the reasons for controversy concerning Persepolis and there is not a section that lists possible controversies although some of them are mentioned in the reception section.
 * Do the links work?
 * There is one link in the reception section that is vague and does not work. It makes reference to a paper that discusses the use of Persepolis in classrooms but the link does not connect to the paper, only an error screen.
 * What else could be improved?
 * I think that the second section on the background that discusses the books awards should be moved to the reception section because it describes the success of the book, not the background of it.
 * There should be more paraphrasing and less quotations. Some of the quotations can probably be taken out and paraphrased instead.

Proposed Contributions to Persepolis

Feminism in the East
Satrapi’s graphic memoir contains themes concerning feminist ideals and the hegemonic power of the state. Satrapi uses the context of the Iranian Revolution to criticize the hypocrisy of state-enforced social pressures that seek to enact violence. During the Iranian Revolution martyrdom had been nationalized by the state in order to encourage young men to participate in the revolution and strict social rules were forced upon women and justified as protection. toward women and justify it as protection. Satrapi’s recount of her harassment by both male and female members of the Guardians of the Revolution because of her untraditional behavior and clothing exemplifies the hypocrisy the enforcement of their beliefs. Although Satrapi criticizes the socio-political pressures, she does not fully dismiss her Iranian identity. Marji struggles with finding her identity because she is torn between a deep connection with her Iranian heritage and culture and the political and religious pressure enforced by the state. Satrapi’s struggle with societal pressures is based on her belief that the Islamic state oppresses women when it regulates their expression and dictates their beliefs.

The veil is a popular symbol of Middle Eastern culture and Satrapi uses it to challenge ethnocentric perceptions about Middle Eastern culture and feminism. Jennifer Worth, an Adjunct Assistant Professor at Wagner College, presents that Satrapi uses the veil as a metaphor to describe the desire to control women. Worth proposes that the Guardians of the Revolution wield the cultural symbolism of the veil to oppress the social liberties of women, while Marji herself dons the symbolic veils of makeovers in Austria to escape social ostracization for her Iranian identity. Through her utilization of the veil as a symbol of concealing latent struggles, Satrapi contends that the confusion surrounding Marji’s transition into adulthood stems from her complex beliefs and feelings about her Iranian heritage.

The use of the veil in Persepolis has also been used to combat the Western perceptions that it is solely a symbol of oppression. The perceptions are challenged in the first chapter of Persepolis similarly titled ‘The Veil,’ where Satrapi illustrates young girls playing in the schoolyard with their veils. Lisa Botshon, a professor of English, and Melinda Plastas, a professor of Women and Gender studies, comment that Satrapi’s depictions of the veil illuminate for Western audiences the extent of Middle Eastern women’s agency. The depictions challenge the Western notion that women who wear the veil are helpless and victims of brutal social oppression.