User:Carlyroell/Saint Mark's Body Brought to Venice/Isabelaz Peer Review

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Carlyroell
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I don't think that much detail into St. Mark's life is relevant. If the reader wants to know all this information, they can go to the Wikipedia page of St. Mark, which is hyperlinked. I also don't think the last sentence about Serene Fass is necessary, since it feels out of place -- you didn't mention her before and the reader won't know the significance of that statement. As someone who clicked on this painting's page, I would like to know more about the composition, the painter, and perhaps the Scuola that commissioned it.

Also, the tone you take is a bit choppy. It feels like you're only stating fact after fact that don't connect or are under explained. The article is neutral, which is great, but make sure you create an arch that is easy for us to follow.

Considering the sources, please add them as linked citations. Also consider hyperlinking words that your reader is not familiar with, and that you won't explain yourself, such as "Gospel," "Pamphylia," and "Barnabas."