User:Carolina Banks/sandbox

Article Evaluation 1. The article starts out by mentioning the phenomenon of ageing in humans and other species, but is apart of a larger article of human growth and development. It seems to be combining the topics of human growth and development and ageing instead of just ageing. That cause the article to be distracting. Also, there are mentions of studies throughout the article that are not referenced and do not seem to be relevant to the topic. 2. The article seems to be neutral and mostly scientific. 3. Some of the links work and route to reliable sources, but there are still some citations needed. Most of the links support the argument, but there are some claims (such as the one about cyborgs) that seem unnecessary to the overall content. As well, the sociology section is much shorter than the others which may indicate that there needs to be more referencing and content. 4. No. There are several facts that make claims but don't have a citation. 5. There is a study that seems to be out of date about ageing in mice, that also doesn't have a citation. Some of the information seems extraneous and makes the article a bit more confusing and scattered. 6. There are talks about correcting the title's spelling, modifying external links, and other suggested material inclusion. 7. The article is a level-3 vital article (lol) (vital, life, ageing...) (anyway I thought it was punny) and is apart of 6 wikiprojects (Ageing and culture, Biology, Health and Fitness, Medicine, World's Oldest People, and Sociology)

Article Proposal

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Immortality#Physical_immortality

The section on physical immortality is short and a sociological perspective on immortality may add to the usefulness of the article. Sources: Reichard, M. (2017). Review: Evolutionary perspectives on ageing. Seminars In Cell And Developmental Biology, 70(Science communication in the field of fundamental biomedical research), 99-107. doi:10.1016/j.semcdb.2017.05.013

Petralia, R. S., Mattson, M. P., & Yao, P. J. (2014). Review: Aging and longevity in the simplest animals and the quest for immortality. Ageing Research Reviews, 1666-82. doi:10.1016/j.arr.2014.05.003

Gopal C, B. (2016). In Search of Rationality in Human Longevity and Immortality. Mens Sana Monographs, Vol 14, Iss 1, pp 187–213 (2016), (1), 187. doi:10.4103/0973-1229.193083

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Retirement

A section about the social costs, demographic shifts, or dependency ratio could be added to improve the usefulness of the article.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Anti-aging_movement

The social implications of the anti-ageing movement could be added to this article.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Voluntary_Human_Extinction_Movement

This would be interesting to fact check the sources and to find the ideology of opposing SMOs.

Article Outline:

1	Definitions 1.1	Scientific 1.2	Religious 2	Alchemy 3	Physical immortality (Considering making edits/additions to this section) 3.1	Causes of death 3.2	Biological immortality 3.3	Prospects for human biological immortality 4	Religious views 4.1	Ancient Greek religion 4.2	Buddhism 4.3	Christianity 4.4	Hinduism 4.5	Judaism 4.6	Taoism 4.7	Zoroastrianism 5	Philosophical Arguments for the Immortality of the Soul 5.1	Alcmaeon of Croton 5.2	Plato 5.3	Plotinus 5.4	Metochites 5.5	Avicenna 5.6	Aquinas 5.7	Descartes 5.8	Leibniz 5.9	Moses Mendelssohn 6	Ethics of immortality (May make edits here) 6.1	Undesirability of immortality 7	Politics 8	Symbols 9	Fiction 10	See also 11	References 12	Further reading 13	External links 13.1	Religious and spiritual prospects for immortality 13.2	In literature


 * Also considering adding a section about the Social Implications of Immortality******

First Draft

14 Social Implications

If human beings were to achieve immortality, there would most likely be a change in the worlds' social structures. Sociologists argue that human beings' awareness of their own mortality shapes their behavior. This means that because we are aware of our eventual mortality, our social structures are built with the consideration of an average life course for a human. **Peer Review by Nicole Abrams
 * I think the information that you have added in regards to social implications and how it relates to immortality is great so far! The only grammatical error I spotted was at the beginning of the second sentence. It looks like you meant to make "Sociologist" plural, so just adding "'s" to the end of the word would fix it.
 * Peer Review Response***
 * Thank you for your review. I will go in and correct the grammatical error. I am at a loss of what else I could safely add to the article as there is not much out there about the hypothetical society of immortal humans.