User:Carolinelamarjewell/Margo Grant Walsh/Corefire07 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Margo Grant Walsh    Carolinelamarjewell


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Margo Grant Walsh


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Margo Grant Walsh

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

the second paragraph in the introduction could be move into the professional career or early life sections.