User:Carrotplushie/The Promised Neverland

Current Lead Section (from Wikipedia Page)
"The Promised Neverland (Japanese: 約束のネバーランド, Hepburn: Yakusoku no Nebārando) is a Japanese manga series written by Kaiu Shirai and illustrated by Posuka Demizu. It was serialized in Shueisha's Weekly Shōnen Jump from August 2016 to June 2020, with the individual chapters collected and published by Shueisha into twenty tankōbon volumes. The story follows a group of orphaned children in their escape plan from an orphanage after they realize a dark secret. In North America, Viz Media licensed the manga and serialized it on their digital Weekly Shonen Jump magazine.

The Promised Neverland has been adapted into an anime television series produced by CloverWorks and broadcast on Fuji TV's Noitamina programming block. The series' first season ran for 12 episodes from January to March 2019. A second season premiered in January 2021. A live-action film adaptation was released in December 2020. Amazon Studios is also developing an American live-action series.

As of December 2020, The Promised Neverland had over 26 million copies in circulation, including digital versions, making it one of the best-selling manga series. In 2018, the manga won the 63rd Shogakukan Manga Award in the shōnen category. Meanwhile, the anime series has been considered one of the best of the 2010s" (pasted from the original Wikipedia page).

My Edits to the Lead Section

 * 1) Change "The story follows a group of orphaned children in their escape plan form an orphanage after they realize a dark secret" to "The series follows a group of orphaned children in their plan to escape from their orphanage, after learning of the dark truth behind their existence and the purpose of the orphanage."
 * 2) Take the last sentence "In North America, Viz Media licensed the manga and serialized it on their digital Weekly Shonen Jump magazine." out from the first paragraph, and instead add it after the second sentence of the same paragraph - so after the sentence "It was serialized in Shueisha's Weekly Shōnen Jump from August 2016 to June 2020, with the individual chapters collected and published by Shueisha into twenty tankōbon volumes."
 * 3) Rearrange the third paragraph by chronological order - so instead of the information going from 2020 to 2018, it'll go from 2018 to 2020. I will reorganize it as such: "The anime series has been considered one of the best of the 2010s. In 2018, the manga won the 3rd Shogakukan Manga Award in the shōnen category. As of December 2020, The Promised Neverland had over 26 million copies in circulation, including digital versions, making it one of the best-selling manga series.

Edited Lead Section (my edits will be italicized, underlined, and bold):
"The Promised Neverland (Japanese: 約束のネバーランド, Hepburn: Yakusoku no Nebārando) is a Japanese manga series written by Kaiu Shirai and illustrated by Posuka Demizu. It was serialized in Shueisha's Weekly Shōnen Jump from August 2016 to June 2020, with the individual chapters collected and published by Shueisha into twenty tankōbon volumes.  In North America, Viz Media licensed the manga and serialized it on their digital Weekly Shonen Jump magazine.   The series follows a group of orphaned children in their plan to escape from their orphanage, after learning of the dark truth behind their existence and the purpose of the orphanage. 

The Promised Neverland has been adapted into an anime television series produced by CloverWorks and broadcast on Fuji TV's Noitamina programming block. The series' first season ran for 12 episodes from January to March 2019. A second season premiered in January 2021. A live-action film adaptation was released in December 2020. Amazon Studios is also developing an American live-action series.

' The anime series has been considered one of the best of the 2010s. In 2018, the manga won the 3rd Shogakukan Manga Award in the shōnen category. As of December 2020, The Promised Neverland had over 26 million copies in circulation, including digital versions, making it one of the best-selling manga series. '

Current Setting Section (from Wikipedia Page)
It is the year 2045, and over 1000 years after an agreement called "The Promise" was made to end a long war between humans and demons. Each would live their own separate "worlds"; the demon world, with several Farms for breeding human offerings to feed the demons, and the human world. The promise involved humans collaborating with the demons to return any human escapees to the Farms. Each Farm had a main house managed by a human "Mom", in which the children, who each have their own set of identifying numbers on the left side of their necks, believed they were orphans with no knowledge of life outside the boundary, and believed that when they left, they were being adopted (pasted from the original Wikipedia page).

My Edits to the Setting Section

 * 1) added "who each have their own set of identifying numbers on the left side of their necks" to the middle of the last sentence of this section (but I was confused and accidentally published it to the actual Wikipedia Page already, my bad).
 * 2) will change this first edit of "who each have their own set of identifying numbers on the left side of their necks" to: "who are branded with their own set of identifying numbers tattooed onto the left side of their necks"
 * 3) reword the second sentence "Each would live their own separate "worlds"; the demon world, with several Farms for breeding human offerings to feed the demons, and the human world" into: "According to "The Promise" agreement made between the demons and humans, each would live in their own separate "worlds" - the demon world, where there are several human breeding farms set up as offerings to appease the demons; and the human world, where humans who were not already on the demon side of the "world" get to live as they please, without fear of the demons causing them harm. The only rule to make this promise go smoothly, was for the humans to return any human that escaped from a human breeding farm - as they are the property of the demons."
 * 4) remove the third sentence "The promise involved humans collaborating with the demons to return any human escapees to the Farms" as I will add that information to the reworded sentence second sentence.
 * 5) reword the fourth sentence "Each Farm had a main house managed by a human "Mom", in which the children, who each have their own set of identifying numbers on the left side of their necks, believed they were orphans with no knowledge of life outside the boundary, and believed that when they left, they were being adopted" to: "Within each human breeding farm, which were set up under the guise of an orphanage, there was a human "Mother" who would overlook the children to make sure they grew up as intelligent and delicious as possible - as the smarter a human child was, the better they tasted. The children at the "orphanage" - who are branded with their own set of identifying numbers tattooed onto the left side of their necks - had absolutely no knowledge of life outside the boundary of the orphanage, and were made to believe that when they were adopted they would be taken to their new family - but in reality, they were taken out to their deaths as high-quality offerings to wealthy and well-known demons."
 * 6) make sure to add citations on the first manga volume - as that is where all this information comes from.

Edited Setting Section (my edits will be italicized, underlined, and bold):
It is the year 2045, and over 1000 years after an agreement called "The Promise" was made to end a long war between humans and demons. ' According to "The Promise" agreement made between the demons and humans, each would live in their own separate "worlds" - the demon world, where there are several human breeding farms set up as offerings to appease the demons; and the human world, where humans who were not already on the demon side of the "world" get to live as they please, without fear of the demons causing them harm. The only rule to make this promise go smoothly, was for the humans to return any human that escaped from a human breeding farm - as they are the property of the demons. Within each human breeding farm, which were set up under the guise of an orphanage, there was a human "Mother" who would overlook the children to make sure they grew up as intelligent and delicious as possible - as the smarter a human child was, the better they tasted. The children at the "orphanage" - who are branded with their own set of identifying numbers tattooed onto the left side of their necks - had absolutely no knowledge of life outside the boundary of the orphanage, and were made to believe that when they were adopted they would be taken to their new family - but in reality, they were taken out to their deaths as high-quality offerings to wealthy and well-known demons. '

Current Plot Section (from Wikipedia Page)
Main article: List of The Promised Neverland characters

Emma is an 11-year-old orphan living in Grace Field House, a self-contained orphanage housing her and 37 other orphans. Life has never been better: with gourmet food; plush beds; clean clothes; games; and the love from their "Mom", Isabella. The bright and cheerful Emma always aces the regular exams with her two best friends, Ray and Norman. The orphans are allowed complete freedom, except to venture beyond the grounds or the gate, which connects the house to the outside world.

One night, an orphan named Conny is sent away to be "adopted", but Emma, noticing she left her prized stuffed animal behind, goes with Norman to give it to her. At the gate, they find Conny dead and discover the truth of their existence in this idyllic orphanage—to be raised as meat for the species known as Demons. Emma and Norman join with Ray to escape from Grace Field House with their orphan siblings, but the younger children are left behind, Norman having been "adopted" earlier on. The escapees find life outside the Farm is filled with dangers, but under the leadership of Emma and Ray, they become determined to return and free their remaining siblings, along with children from the other Farms.

My Edits to the Plot Section

 * 1) Rewrite first sentence of the first paragraph - so instead of "Emma is an 11-year-old orphan living in Grace Field House, a self-contained orphanage housing her and 37 other orphans," it'll be "11-year-old Emma is one of 37  orphans living at the Grace Field House Orphanage."
 * 2) Reword second sentence of the first paragraph from "Life has never been better: with gourmet food; plush beds; clean clothes; games; and the love from their "Mom", Isabella" to "Life is as great as can be for the children at the Grace Field House Orphanage - they eat delicious food, have comfortable beds, they can play games to their hearts content, and, most important of all, get the nurturing love from their "Mother" Isabella."
 * 3) Rewrite the third sentence of the first paragraph from "The bright and cheerful Emma always aces the regular exams with her two best friends, Ray and Norman" to "The children also attend "home school," and are tasked with completing different tests (which are actually used to gauge how "delicious" they are - since the smarter a human is, the better they taste to the demons who farm them)."
 * 4) Add in "that the children of the Grace Field House Orphanage who are "adopted" are actually being killed and..." in the middle of the second sentence of the second paragraph.

Edited Plot Section (my edits will be italicized, underlined, and bold):
' 11-year-old Emma is one of 37 orphans living at the Grace Field House Orphanage.   Life is as great as can be for the children at the Grace Field House Orphanage - they eat delicious food, have comfortable beds, they can play games to their hearts content, and, most important of all, get the nurturing love from their "Mother" Isabella. The children also attend "home school," and are tasked with completing different tests (which are actually used to gauge how "delicious" they are - since the smarter a human is, the better they taste to the demons who farm them). ' The orphans are allowed complete freedom, except to venture beyond the grounds or the gate, which connects the house to the outside world.

One night, an orphan named Conny is sent away to be "adopted", but Emma, noticing she left her prized stuffed animal behind, goes with Norman to give it to her. At the gate, they find Conny dead and discover the truth of their existence in this idyllic orphanage—  that the children of the Grace Field House Orphanage who are "adopted" are actually being killed and  raised as meat for the species known as Demons. Emma and Norman join with Ray to escape from Grace Field House with their orphan siblings, but the younger children are left behind, Norman having been "adopted" earlier on. The escapees find life outside the Farm is filled with dangers, but under the leadership of Emma and Ray, they become determined to return and free their remaining siblings, along with children from the other Farms.



Current Manga Section (from Wikipedia Page)
The Promised Neverland is written by Kaiu Shirai and illustrated by Posuka Demizu. It is Shirai and Demizu's second collaboration; their first series was Poppy no Negai. It originated from a draft, titled Neverland (later expanded to The Promised Neverland due to copyright issues), that Shirai brought to the Jump editorial department in 2014, which covered the series' entire first story arc in over 300 pages. The series began in the 2016 34th issue of Shueisha's Weekly Shōnen Jump on August 1, 2016. In August 2019, it was announced that the series had entered the "climax" of its final arc. The manga finished in the 2020 28th issue of Weekly Shōnen Jump on June 15, 2020. Shueisha has collected its chapters into twenty individual tankōbon volumes, released from December 2, 2016 to October 2, 2020.

On July 25, 2016, Viz Media announced that they would digitally publish the first three chapters of the series on Weekly Shonen Jump magazine. Thereafter, published the manga's new chapters simultaneously with the Japanese release. The first printed volume in North America was released on December 5, 2017. Shueisha began to simulpublish the series in English on the website and app Manga Plus in January 2019.

A 16-page one-shot chapter about Ray was published in the 44th issue of Weekly Shōnen Jump on October 5, 2020. A 36-page one-shot chapter about Sister Krone was published in the 2021 1st issue of Weekly Shōnen Jump on December 7, 2020. A 19-page chapter will be released at "The Promised Neverland Special Exhibition", event that will be held in Tokyo from December 11, 2020 through January 11, 2021. A 32-page chapter about Isabella was published in the 2021 2nd issue of Weekly Shōnen Jump on December 14, 2020. A 32-page one-shot, titled "We Were Born", which tells the story of "another The Promised Neverland", was published in the 2021 combined 5th–6th issue of Weekly Shōnen Jump on January 4, 2021.

A comedic spin-off titled Oyakusoku no Neverland was published in the Shōnen Jump+ application from January 11 to March 28, 2019 and its compiled tankōbon volume was released on June 4, 2019.

My Edits to the Manga Section

 * 1) change the second sentence from the first paragraph from "It is Shirai and Demizu's second collaboration; their first series was Poppy no Negai." to "It is Shirai and Demizu's second collaboration - their first being the Poppy no Negai series."
 * 2) change the third sentence of the first paragraph from "It originated from a draft, titled Neverland (later expanded to The Promised Neverland due to copyright issues), that Shirai brought to the Jump editorial department in 2014, which covered the series' entire first story arc in over 300 pages." to "The series originated from a draft originally title Neverland, but was later changed to The Promised Neverland after running into some copyright issues. In 2014, Shirai brought the 300 page The Promised Neverland draft to the Shonen Jump editorial department."
 * 3) change "The series began in the 2016 34th issue of Shueisha's Weekly Shōnen Jump on August 1, 2016." to "The series was published on August 1, 2016, in the 34th issue of Shueisha's Weekly Shonen Jump."
 * 4) reword the second-to-the-last sentence of the first paragraph from "The manga finished in the 2020 28th issue of Weekly Shōnen Jump on June 15, 2020." to "The manga was finalized on June 15, 2020, in the 28th issue of Weekly Shonen Jump for the year of 2020."
 * 5) add the word "they" after "thereafter," in the sentence "Thereafter, published the manga's new chapters simultaneously with the Japanese release." - so, "Thereafter, they published the manga's new chapters simultaneously with the Japanese release."

Edited Manga Section (my edits will be italicized, underlined, and bold):
The Promised Neverland is written by Kaiu Shirai and illustrated by Posuka Demizu. ' It is Shirai and Demizu's second collaboration - their first being the Poppy no Negai series.   The series originated from a draft originally title Neverland, but was later changed to The Promised Neverland after running into some copyright issues. In 2014, Shirai brought the 300 page The Promised Neverland draft to the Shonen Jump editorial department.   The series was published on August 1, 2016, in the 34th issue of Shueisha's Weekly Shonen Jump.  In August 2019, it was announced that the series had entered the "climax" of its final arc.  The manga was finalized on June 15, 2020, in the 28th issue of Weekly Shonen Jump for the year of 2020. ' Shueisha has collected its chapters into twenty individual tankōbon volumes, released from December 2, 2016 to October 2, 2020.

On July 25, 2016, Viz Media announced that they would digitally publish the first three chapters of the series on Weekly Shonen Jump magazine. ' Thereafter, they published the manga's new chapters simultaneously with the Japanese release. ' The first printed volume in North America was released on December 5, 2017. Shueisha began to simulpublish the series in English on the website and app Manga Plus in January 2019.

A 16-page one-shot chapter about Ray was published in the 44th issue of Weekly Shōnen Jump on October 5, 2020. A 36-page one-shot chapter about Sister Krone was published in the 2021 1st issue of Weekly Shōnen Jump on December 7, 2020. A 19-page chapter will be released at "The Promised Neverland Special Exhibition", event that will be held in Tokyo from December 11, 2020 through January 11, 2021. A 32-page chapter about Isabella was published in the 2021 2nd issue of Weekly Shōnen Jump on December 14, 2020. A 32-page one-shot, titled "We Were Born", which tells the story of "another The Promised Neverland", was published in the 2021 combined 5th–6th issue of Weekly Shōnen Jump on January 4, 2021.

A comedic spin-off titled Oyakusoku no Neverland was published in the Shōnen Jump+ application from January 11 to March 28, 2019 and its compiled tankōbon volume was released on June 4, 2019.