User:CarterWiser/JID/LittleGreenAlien281 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

user:CarterWiser


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * user:CarterWiser/JID


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
In reading your article I found some pieces that I liked, and some that maybe can be a little more developed. I believe that all the information that you have is informative and relevant to the article. A good way to improve your article is to take the existing information and expand on it as much as you can. This will give the readers some very good facts about JID that could not be found in this article before you edited it. I imagine that readers would be very interested in learning more about JID’s experience with Earthgang for example. I think your contribution could also benefit from a more neutral point of view. Make the sentence structure more factual sounding instead of using worlds like I or you to achieve this. Something else to consider is using hyper links in your final product. These can make the article easier to understand for someone who may not know a lot about a certain topic mentioned. Also, don’t forget to site your sources whenever you are finished. Overall, I really like all of the information and facts that you have, I just think you may need to add a little more to it and make it more neutral. I hope this review helps you to make your article even better than it already is. I wish you the best of luck with your final edit my friend.