User:Carter McCrae/Israeli–Palestinian conflict/Milan Rosen Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Carte McCrae


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Carter%20McCrae/Israeli%E2%80%93Palestinian_conflict?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Israeli–Palestinian conflict

Content:
The content written in the rough draft is very relevant to the article, and expands upon many water and earth impacts that are caused by the Israel Palestine conflict. All of the content referenced and written is up to date due to the fact that the Israeli Palestine conflict is currently ongoing, and the references and sources are also very recent. One piece of content I have noticed that is out of place or 'does not belong' is the interaction between citations and punctuation. In the Israeli-Palestine conflict article, citations are placed after punctuation, but in your rough draft the punctuation is placed after the citation. This has already been

Tone and Balance:
The content added does a very good job of remaining neutral, nothing seems biased to any particular side, and both sides seem to be evenly represented. The content isn't trying to persuade the reader either. It strictly discusses natural resources and other neutral topics.

Sources and References
All the content referenced is current and related to the subject being discussed. All the claims and new content are backed up by references of sufficient quality and standard. The reference list at the bottom of the rough draft is made properly, and all of the links I tried worked as intended. The sources were current and thorough and I have no negative remarks about them.

Organization
The content of the rough draft is concise, clear, and easy to read. The content within the paragraphs is also grammatically correct, and is written quite well. The only point I have on grammar is that the description of the only photo in the rough draft has a typo in it. Specifically, the word 'map'.

Images and Media
The rough draft provides one image of the Gaza strip fence border. This image is very clear, and adds a lot of understanding to the topic being discussed. The only improvement I would suggest is to bolster the image description slightly by describing what the orange shaded regions are as well. The image is also laid out in a matter very reminiscent of established wikipedia articles, which is very good.

Overall Impressions
I believe that the content being added will certainly improve the overall quality of the article by providing a perspective on the natural resources being impacted by the Israeli-Palestine conflict, which the original article lacked. As such, the strength of the content being added is being able to increase any reader's understanding of the conflict even further.