User:Cassidybohne/Raunch aesthetics/Lkm4gn Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cassidybohne and their group members


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cassidybohne/Raunch_aesthetics?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Raunch aesthetics

Evaluate the drafted changes
The Lead seems a bit misleading in terms as there are people mentioned in the article that are not "women in hip hop". Possibly looked to find where the term originated might add some more reliability to the article.

Other things that could be fixed in terms of the article are:

- whole section for Rihanna seems unnecessary and should be with the other artist mentioned in the article.

-cutting down some of the wordiness in the entire article