User:CassieClovis02/Mycoplasma ovipneumoniae/Khascall Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

CassieClovis02


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:CassieClovis02/Mycoplasma ovipneumoniae


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mycoplasma ovipneumoniae

Lead
The current article doesn't have much of a structure, and I see you've divided the work into pieces. That makes sense. See if you can lighten up the lead even further to allow a wider audience to understand it. All the content can be kept, but a lighter friendlier 3-sentence summary as a lead would make sense, and making the current top paragraphs into a subsection instead.

Content
You've added a lot of good content and sources. You should add links to a few more articles in Wikipedia (PCR? the various animals, like bighorns and norwegian muskox?) to help your reader explore and understand the topic.

Tone and Balance
The content reads as scientific and solid.

Sources and References
Your sources look good.

Organization
The writing is clean but very technical. I think it would help to break it into thematic paragraphs. For example, in your symptoms, testing, and prevention section, you could have one paragraph for each thing (symptoms, testing, prevention). Right now what you have is a bit of a wall of text. It's good text, but it needs to be broken up into smaller chunks to help your reader.

Images and Media
It's a pity there's no photo of the disease under a microscope or an infected animal. Readers really appreciate photos.

Overall impressions
In general, I think you're quite close. A few more refinements (copyedit, a readable lead, some links, etc.) should be all you need to do (but feel free to keep working). This is a great project!