User:CassieSmith5/Pleistocene megafauna/BeeCandelaria Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

CassieSmith5


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Pleistocene megafauna


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Because you is focusing on adding information to the Lead and Content of the article, I will focus on sections about that, and bold whenever I talk about the other guiding sections.

Lead

The lead is very short for this article, and I believe that some more analysis as to why this article is important would fit well here. Because this article is not a list, I think it requires some purpose. Especially is you takes some of the advice I use in the content section, I think beefing up this Lead portion will do well.

Content

I like your ideas for content! Perhaps under "North America" and "South America" you could add sub-sections of "Interactions with People" and include information on oral traditions here. Or eve, perhaps, adding a sub-section about Oral Traditions and Megafauna would get the point across better. I think this article is very science oriented and could benefit from an anthropological/archaeological view here, to balance the tone of the article. Adding Dr. Steeve's book as a reference will also help balance out the article and add Indigenous views here as well.

Organization

I think that most of your writing will fall, at least spatially, under the "Great Plains" or "Pacific Coast" sections if I am not mistaken. However, if either one doesn't fit very well, I would consider adding a new section under the North America section about human interactions, like I mentioned before. Here, you could add the oral traditions and overall Indigenous traditions regarding the bison and mastadons, but also the other traditions that Dr. Steeve's points out such as the Thunderbird (I did research on this for the Blog #2(? #1? Who knows, the one with the podcast with Dr. Steeve)) and the Mammoth dances. All these animals are kept alive through oral traditions, not just the fossil record.

Media

I'm not sure if you were wanting to add media as a part of your wikipedia project, but it looks like North America doesn't have any pictures under it, and it is a great place to put them.