User:CassieSmith5/Pleistocene megafauna/Sam Wege Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

CassieSmith5


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:CassieSmith5/Pleistocene_megafauna?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Pleistocene megafauna
 * Pleistocene megafauna

Evaluate the drafted changes
For the lead, I feel like you could definitely add a sentence or two that introduce the various sections of the article. Right now I really have no idea what to expect other than that there were big animals a long time ago.

I think in the north america section one thing that could be improved on (and you probably know more about than some) is the consideration of the Younger Dryas as a extinction event. If the Younger Dryas had an impact on NA to the same extent that it did Europe, this is definitely an important thing to talk about...

Right now, it really feels like the NA section is really just focused on extinction. 'What are different explanations for human and environment driven extinctions' seems to be the only question that they grapple with. I think it is important to consider megafaunae's relationships with humans beyond just how they were driven extinct. What role did they play in culture, art, weaponry (mentioned v briefly with Clovis proliferation), or other developments? Perhaps this warrants an entirely new section, rather than mention in the "regions affected" section.

In general this "regions affected" section seems quite inappropriate given there's already a (much more full) wikipedia article on the Quaternary extinction event. Probably most of the stuff in that section could be in a "Pleistocene megafauna" section of the "quaternary extinction event" tab...

Like the lead, both the NA and SA sections lack compelling introductions. It seems like a lot of the current text in these sections is just a list of the things that the previous editor knows... could a paragraph be added to introduce and tie together these sections?

There are way too many lists of species after species in both sections that are mostly meaningless blocks of text in their current format. You could convert this info into a big table that tracks species, region, cause of extinction/migration, etc.