User:Casually Anonymous/Foraging/Coffeebeangirl Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

casually anonymous


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Casually%20Anonymous/Foraging?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Foraging

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

From what I can see there have not been any updates to the lead section. It may be a good idea to review your lead section and include small bits of information that you have added throughout your article. The lead section is already developed well but it could be strengthened with some new information. The introductory sentence included in the lead section is great as it encompasses the definition of foraging. All information included in the lead is included throughout the article. Overall, the lead is great but could incorporate some new information into it!

Content

The genetics paragraph is great. It was great to add another example as it makes the information easier to understand. The addition of the search behavior paragraph was great! I would just suggest moving the reference up higher in the paragraph to show the whole paragraph uses reference 2. When reading both parasitism paragraphs, I found your reworded paragraph to be a little unclear, especially when you said "counteract the procurement". Maybe keep the paragraph as is in the published version and just add the citations? The paragraph about foraging arena theory is a great addition! No concerns here! Group foraging and the ideal free distribution theory paragraph is looking good. Great to have a reference in there now. Maybe just read over once or twice more to make sure that you are reworded it well enough so it is not marked as plagiarism

Tone and Balance

Tone and balance are great! No issues here!

Sources and Reference

The sources you used are great and relevant to the topic! All of your source links appear to be working!

Organization

Organization is great! You lucked out with an article that basically already had this done for you! haha

Images and Media

The images and captions used in this article are great

Overall Impressions

Your contribution will definitely add to the article. You have added lots of examples using relatively new scientific literature which will help the reader understand the various concepts. I would suggest having a second look at the paragraphs you reworded and maybe change some sentence structure to avoid plagiarism markings and adding a little bit more information to your lead section to make it more inclusive of all info. Overall, this was very well done! I look forward to reading the completed article!