User:Casually Anonymous/Foraging/Koafve Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Casually Anonymous - "Foraging"


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Casually%20Anonymous/Foraging?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Foraging

Evaluate the drafted changes
NOTES: (SP) = spelling, (GR) = grammar

General Review;

- Make sure you have more than just one or two references for each information claim. This will add more credibility to your facts, and ensures they're not underrepresented!

- I really like that you included an example in your "genetics" section that we covered in class. I'm wondering if you would be able to expand further on this topic, possibly adding in some information about other dominance patterns? This may help give a broader, general overview of the topic of the genetics of foraging. I think even including another study may be helpful.

- Good job on finding peer-reviewed articles!

- I'm wondering if it might be interesting to add some information under the "Presence of predators" section, as it seems relatively underdeveloped. The original article mentions balancing risk between gaining resources and avoiding predators. Maybe you can add some information based on what we learned about in that assignment that covered costs vs benefits in gaining resources. This section also mentions an example of A. longimana, you could also expand on what exactly this example is.

- Great job on keeping the tone of the article balanced and neutral. I also like the formatting with the different sections you have, it makes the article easy to follow along with.

Detailed Review;

- "Similarly, parasitism can affect the way in which animals forage." I'm not sure what the word "similarly" is referring to here, could this be reworded to be more clear?

- "Adaptations in diets aid in the prevention of contracting parasites, as well as self-medicating either prophylactically***(SP) or therapeutically." This sentence reads a bit strangely, could be reworded to - "Adaptions in diet helps prevent parasitic infection, and can be used in a self-medicating way either..."

- "Cruise searchers forage by being continuously on the hunt for prey at the outer borders of the volume that is being searched. While ambush searchers forage by sitting and waiting." This is a bit awkward to read, it could be reworded to - "Cruise searchers forage by continuously hunting for prey at the outer borders of the area that is being searched, while ambush searchers forage by sitting and waiting."

Great job!