User:CatAgu23/Emilia Ortiz/DiMel08 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) I am reviewing CatAgu23


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:CatAgu23/Emilia_Ortiz?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Emilia Ortiz
 * Emilia Ortiz

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * 1) There are a few grammatical errors.
 * 2) You did a great job of maintaining neutrality. You presented the information without opining.
 * 3) You have balanced information.
 * 4) Many sentences could be expanded further.
 * 5) You could discuss the type of art Ortiz produced. Was is surreal, contemporary, cubism, realism?
 * 6) Ortiz was also a photographer but you did not mention that in your article.
 * 7) You could also discuss the medium she used. The original article states that she did well in watercolors, but you did not mention that in your article. Did she also use acrylic or oils?
 * 8) You mentioned that she was a prizewinning poet, which prize did she win and what year? The sentence for this information should be expanded further or broken into two complete sentences. Did she win the prize in 1986 or is this when the book was published?
 * 9) If you were able to find out what common sayings inspired Ortiz's work, I would suggest adding that to the paragraph. Inspiration, especially if it is based in tradition, is a very important aspect of meaningful art.
 * 10) What type of painting did she study under Jose Vizcarra? If you have that info, it is relevant to the article since you mentioned that point.
 * 11) If you know where specifically she was exhibited abroad, I would suggest adding a section for these exhibitions and any other notable art pieces. It could help expand your article if you added information on specific art from her museum.