User:CathStudies/Front of house/Cronacrab Peer Review

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Cathstudies
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:CathStudies/Front of house
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Front of house

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * I'm really impressed with how many sources you've managed to scrounge up-- especially for such an annoying topic to research for.
 * Don't refer to "front of house" as "FOH" in the article. It's too casual.
 * The BOH portion of the lead in your draft is too detailed for a subset of the article. Only a sentence or two is warranted in the lead. Consider moving it to the Back of house section.
 * Of the provided options for the lead, I prefer Intro #2. Should you perhaps move the article to "Front of house (theater)" in order to maintain focus on the focus of the class?
 * When you move your drafted content to mainspace, make sure to avoid using title case anywhere. Wikipedia doesn't use title case for article and section titles.
 * Make sure you source everything with an inline citation. Doing all the little things, like linking to articles at the first use of a topic that has an article is fine to leave for someone else, but citations are what make Wikipedia verifiable.
 * The "Terms and origin" section is sweet and to the point.
 * For the "Front of house design" section, make sure to avoid "fluff"-sounding language, such as "plays a critical role", even if supported by sources. Replace with more even-handed phrases, such as "is important" or "attempts to".
 * In this section, you mention "Innovative solutions and strategic planning". Do you have any examples to include in the article? I think it would be an interesting inclusion.
 * The "Back of house design" section is excellently written.
 * Regarding the "Operations, roles, & responsibilities" section, I very much prefer the middle option. It does a good job describing what the front of house and back of house employees do. I'd recommend not including the sentence "Overall, effective coordination between FOH and BOH personnel is essential for delivering seamless customer experiences and maintaining operational efficiency in any venue or establishment." It sounds like you're trying to sell me on house employees!
 * Do the front of house and back of house employees ever interact?
 * Drop the two sources that are already in the live article. Neither is worth trying to keep.
 * I really like the picture that's included in the live article. It's a pretty and relevant photo.
 * Overall, your draft is on its way to changing the Front of house article from a stub to a useful source of information on this topic!