User:Catherinefort/Céline Sciamma/Jsweav3 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Catherinefort)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Catherinefort/C%C3%A9line_Sciamma?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Céline Sciamma

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The "lead" section does not appear to be updated in the draft. I think think that your edits and contributions to the "Career" section of the draft are valuable. Specifically, the supplemental information about Sciamma's debut film, Water Lillies, particularly informative. I found the material added to be neutral and well-presented and concise. I think the content added to the article has strengthened it overall. If there were any suggestions for improvement, it would be to investigate ways to strengthening the contribution you have made by supporting the conciseness and clarity of the article.

thank you for this feedback! I will revisit the lead section when finalizing my draft. Cat