User:Cawna89/History of leprosy/Bmeade08 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

4everStudent22, BaileyH1120, Cawna89, Mwb8265


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Cawna89/History of leprosy


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * History of leprosy

Content
So far the content provided on the symptoms seems to be good. Although, while the NIH and CDC are very good sources, I think finding more sources that document these symptoms might help give your readers and yourselves a better understanding of how the symptoms progress. Next, the part on the Colonial Period is on the right track and should fit fairly well into the "Historical Accounts" section on the original page. Although, I would properly cite the sources of the claims that you put out in this section since they seem to somewhat conflict with what is stated in the original article. One sentence in particular seems to need to be clarified; that being "This transmission was also present in Africa where European settlers enslaved the local population.". This is because leprosy originated in East Africa, but your sentence makes it seem as if it was brought there and spread by Europeans. You may also want to clarify that this spread via slavery happened in West Africa.

Organization
I think that these symptoms section could also be truncated a bit to make them fit better into the overall article. As it stands right now it is more of a data dump than a commentary on the symptoms. I would start to put these symptoms into a format that flows better with the rest of the article rather than lists. Additionally, the superscript citation links should be places after the the information taken from the source and not at the beginning of the sections you have currently.

Conclusion
This is a good start, and the article you guys were assigned is pretty full of information and it can be kind of hard to find what to information to add. Although with that said, I think you are on the right track. If I had to boil down my main recommendations it would be: work on making the Symptoms section fit better into the main article and make sure your citing properly.