User:Cawna89/History of leprosy/Ryan0708 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Cawna89)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cawna89/History_of_leprosy?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * History of leprosy

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think you need to create a bibliography for your draft because wikipedia has a references/bibliography section at the end of the article. Also you need to remember that your article is not simply about leprosy but it isomer specifically about the disease's history. The majority of your draft talks about the symptoms but that is already discussed in the parent article Leprosy. I think you need to focus more on the history of the disease and modern discoveries. If you are going to talk about the symptoms you can talk about the first time they appeared but any basic information about symptoms, treatment, testing, etc is not supposed to be in this article because it is all in the main article because that one provides an overview of the disease. I would also edit your final section because your writing should tell a story about what you are talking about but it seems like a couple of random facts thrown together. You should be pulling your information from multiple sources instead of just one in your final section.