User:Cayeung/Cholestene/Jlt156 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cayeung, Thejigglyjello


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Cayeung/Cholestene
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cholestene
 * Cholestene

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

- I think the article lead is concise and provides a good example on the topic.

- I would briefly include more detail on the importance of cholestenes. You have a paragraph later on for applications -- maybe you could briefly mention these applications at the end of this intro paragraph?

Content

-Added content (figures, text) is up to date and relevant.

-Is there any further sources you could use to expand on the article? I think the article content is well written and concise, but I wish there was more to learn about cholestenes.

-Perhaps you could expand on some detail for the preparation of cholestene? You have the figure, but you do not relate the figure to text.

Tone and Balance

-Content added is neutral and unbiased.

-Maybe for the applications section - it is a bit heavy on the downsides of using cholestene as a cholesterol supplement. Maybe you could add a sentence or two describing the positives of cholestene supplements/mechanism of action.

Sources and References

-Sources are up to date, current, links work.

- A significant amount of sources are from the same website (PubChem), it might help to diversify the databases you're getting information from.

Organization

-Overall sentences within a paragraph are organized well and flow nicely!

-I would reorganize the sections ordering though: applications are typically near the end of an article. I think it would help to have the more "background theory" sections of the article before the applications section.

-I think the tables should be integrated to the text rather than just be there within the article.

Images and Media

-Images are helpful for visualization of cholestene and are clearly drawn!

-Citations are appropriate

-For the one at the start of your article, I would specify which cholestene it is, as it is currently without a caption.

Overall Impression

-Significant improvements over the original article, and now has more details and examples of cholestene. Good job!

-Reorganization of the sections and adding a bit more detail to the applications section will help further boost the article up.