User:Cbenji/Battle of Fimreite/Jackr8106 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cbenji


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cbenji/Battle_of_Fimreite?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Battle of Fimreite

Evaluate the drafted changes
The changes made to the led section are great and very much appreciated. I think like any reader would prefer the summary you gave over the current one. The led section provides more information but also raises a question or two to make the reader want to learn more. As far as I can tell the led section has been the biggest change to the article but the overall tone of the article is very militaristic and hard to read. The Scandinavian names don't help so maybe try and space out introducing new people. Anyways, good luck with the Battle of Fimreite!