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In response to the event, many Canadians have worked hard to establish memorial sites all across the country to ensure that people will become more aware of the incident that occurred. This is intended to force society to recognize how often violence occurs towards women and to appreciate the lives of the women who were killed. Feminism advocates and activists trying to stop violence directed towards women have shown concern about using the massacre to solely represent violence against women. The details of the event may over-shadow the deeper meaning of the day.

The day is aimed to examine the power dynamics between men and women. The news took the ascribed perspective of the killer having mental problems. This effectively dismissed feminist analyses stating that the killer went to this extent to proclaim his anti-feminist opinion. Every act that exists on the spectrum of violence against women happens due to women being viewed as less human than men. That is why the National Day of Remembrance and Action on Violence Against Woman stands for more than simply one massacre. It stands for awareness and change against the violence that occurs to women all around the world at the hands of men. Thirty-five percent of women worldwide have experienced physical and/or sexual intimate partner violence or non-partner sexual violence, according to the United Nations. This day stands for change and for awareness of the power dynamic existing between men and women all over the world.

Summary I personally added a feminist perspective to the article. I talked about how power dynamics between men and women should be a significant part of the discussion on the National Day of Remembrance and Action on Violence Against Woman. I also added the perspective that the news took on the massacre. The news took the standard perspective that the killer was mentally ill. Consequentially, this dismissed any discussion of the violence and hatred that men, and in particular, the killer, disperse onto women. As a group, we added more details about the killer and the event.

Peer Review on Woman's Christian Temperance Union It does not try to convince the reader to accept a certain view-point. The article is cut and dry with facts and a neutral stance. All of the phrases seem neutral as they are mostly fact based. The draft does not make claims from unnamed groups or people. The draft has both negative and positive about the group. I might say it is a little more negative. I am unsure if the Woman's Christian Temperance Union is a problematic group. The statements are all backed by creditable sources.

First Draft In response to the event, many Canadians have worked hard to establish memorial sites all across the country, to ensure that people will become more aware of the incident that occurred, to force society in recognizing how often violence occurs towards women, and to appreciate the lives of the women who were killed. Activists of feminism and violence against women have shown concern about using the massacre to stand for violence against woman more broadly. The details of the event may over-shadow the deeper meaning of the day. The day is aimed for examination of power dynamics between men and woman. The news took the ascribed perspective of the killer having mental problems. This effectively dismissed feminist analyses stating the killer went to this extent to proclaim his anti-feminist opinion.

Addition to Article Activists of feminism and violence against women have showed concern for using the massacre to stand in for violence against women more broadly. The details of the event may over-shadow the deeper meaning of the day; to deal with power dynamics between men and woman.

Rosenberg, S. (1998). Reflections on memorializing december 6. Resources for Feminist Research, 26(3), 203-212. Retrieved from https://ezproxy.lib.uwm.edu/login?url=https://search.proquest.com/docview/194881366?accountid=15078

My Article Evaluation- National Day of Remembrance and Action on Violence Against Women The article lacks a lot of in-depth details on National Day of Remembrance and Action on Violence Against Women. I would like to add a few sections, including a detailed summary about the shooting that occurred in the name of "fighting feminism" and a description on how the day became a holiday. On the talk page, they talk about fixing external links. The article is relevant to the the topic; it discusses the history of the day and how it came about. I think most of the article is underdeveloped since it does not deeply discuss some important information. The article is, however, neutrally written. Two of the source links did not work, but the last one seems to be a reliable source. Some claims and facts are not correctly cited. A few articles I thought would be helpful to the article are linked below. They could provide more background information for this day of remembrance. http://web.a.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.lib.uwm.edu/ehost/results?vid=4&sid=cc6c34c1-e122-4e67-bc87-1c9d0ae043c3%40sdc-v-sessmgr05&bquery=DE+%22NATIONAL+Action+Committee+on+the+Status+of+Women+(Organization)%22&bdata=JkF1dGhUeXBlPWlwLHVpZCZkYj1hOWgmdHlwZT0wJnNpdGU9ZWhvc3QtbGl2ZSZzY29wZT1zaXRl https://www.swc-cfc.gc.ca/commemoration/vaw-vff/remembrance-commemoration-en.html http://web.a.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.lib.uwm.edu/ehost/detail/detail?vid=5&sid=cc6c34c1-e122-4e67-bc87-1c9d0ae043c3%40sdc-v-sessmgr05&bdata=JkF1dGhUeXBlPWlwLHVpZCZzaXRlPWVob3N0LWxpdmUmc2NvcGU9c2l0ZQ%3d%3d#AN=65869154&db=a9h

Article Evaluation https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sex-positive_feminism I thought that the statutory rape section was unneeded and distracting. I think that it does not apply to feminism view points. I think that statutory rape is illegal for a reason. It was also distracting from the point of sexual positivity especially for those who are not exactly supporting of feminism. It gives them the wrong idea. I thought the page did a good job of explaining both sex positive feminist views and opposing feminist views. Some of the sources are from unreliable sources like a blog called lusty lady. All the sources worked, however. The talk page has a few comments about definitions and opposing view points. This page is in the feminism portal and part of a series on feminism. I think that the page talks similarly to our class discussions and topics.