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Article Evaluation HIV/AIDS

Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Everything in this article is relevant to the article topic

Is there anything that distracted you? One thing that did distract me in the article is when it said that the topic of AIDS/HIV is subject to controversies involving religion and that the Catholic Church does not believe condoms is the right way to prevent it, even though that is indeed a very easy way to prevent AIDS/HIV. I found that very interesting and had to read it more than once. Is any information out of date? No information is out of date, but they could have given a little more information around the past two years so its more recent, but it was all within the last 5 years. Is anything missing that could be added? Something that could be improved would be stating around what age is the most common to get AIDS/HIV.

What else could be improved? Another concept that could be improved is stating why people don't use protection or the proper medications to not help it spread to one another. Is it because of money issues, it not being available to them, etc.

Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? This article seems to be neutral, in a way that it is really just stating the facts and what can happen when you get the disease and how it can affect the persons future.

Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? This article really does a good job in covering everything involving the disease from medical issues that can happen and how it can effect other people. I thought it was a very well written article and that it gave a lot of useful information.

Some of the plans I have to contribute to the Separatist Feminism Article would be giving some examples of some experiences woman have had in the pst concerning this type of specific feminism and also giving some more facts about how separatist feminism had an effect on feminism in general.

Is the article's content relevant to the topic? This articles content is relevant to the topic and I enjoyed how it brought in some different topics such as the topic of lesbians into the reading.

Are some areas under- or over-developed? I think the Radical Lesbianism is a little under developed and they could have expanded on it. Is it written neutrally? It is an article that is written pretty neutral and doesn't have any biased opinions.

Does each claim have a citation? Are the citations reliable? Not all of the claims have citations but the ones that do seem pretty reliable.

The article I will be using is called, "The Problem With 'Feminist' Men". https://www.nytimes.com/2018/05/08/opinion/schneiderman-abuse-feminist-men.html

Add to an Article (10/08):

The Problem With 'Feminist Men', overall talks about a New York state attorney general who is living a double life about the concept of feminism. The article states, "At home, it seems, Mr. Schneiderman was a sexual sadist and manipulative misogynist. At work, he was a champion of women’s rights, investigating potential charges against Harvey Weinstein, appearing at events supporting reproductive freedom, and even writing a bill specifically to punish the same kind of strangulation he is said to have forced on some of his partners." https://www.nytimes.com/2018/05/08/opinion/schneiderman-abuse-feminist-men.html

FIRST DRAFT

Male Separatism:

Male separatism is status quo — from petty public space (Manspreading on the train! Catcalling!) to the highest halls of power (scant representation of women in government and industry). This means that feminist separation is rebellion — women excuse ourselves from “institutions, relationships, roles, and activities which are male-defined, male-dominated, and operating for the benefit of males and the maintenance of male privilege.”

And here’s the really important part: “This separation being initiated or maintained, at will, by women [emphasis original].” It’s not about advocating for an island of lesbians cut off for eternity from half the human race (OK, I wouldn’t turn it down, but I’ll admit it’s not practical), rather, it means we say when the walls go up and for how long, who passes through the gate and who waits outside.

These couple of paragraphs are stating there is male separatism along side female separatism. Overall this not just about banishing males and having a world of just females but having females have control of situations and that we get to say no or yes in any situation. It is up to us women what we want from males or what we don't want from them. (this will be starting a new topic in the article)

Radical Feminism:

One particularly infamous group is called Trans-Exclusionary Radical Feminists (TERFs), or as they call themselves, “gender-critical feminists.” Their brand of women-only feminism requires the exclusion of trans* women, on the basis that trans* women are really men. TERFs believe that since gender is socially constructed, to acknowledge non-physical psychological differences between men and women is to support patriarchy. This leads them to exclude trans* people from their movement, claiming things like “a mutilated male body is not a female body” and that transgenderism supports rape culture. The Southern Poverty Law Center classifies TERFs as a hate group. t

This paragraph can help contribute to the radical feminism paragraph. This section of the article is a little short and I thought it would be interesting to add in one of the groups of radical feminism that have existed. The TERFs are not ideally the group people want to be part of because there is so may things that they do that go against the idea of feminism or that may contract what feminism is all about. Peer Review:

I am reviewing the first draft of Second Wave- Feminism Social- Changes Birth Control


 * 1) Does the draft draw conclusions or try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view? The draft wasn't trying to convince the reader of any particular view it was a good draft that gave useful information.


 * 1) Are there any words or phrases that don't feel neutral? The draft was very well written, clear and flowed very well.
 * 2) Does the draft make claims on behalf of unnamed groups or people? All the claims are quoted by people that are mentioned in the sources and there are no random names that are making claims in the draft.
 * 3) Does the draft focus too much on negative or positive information? The information in the draft wasn't being negative or positive in any direction just giving some truthful information.
 * 4) Are there any unsourced statements in the draft, or statements that you can't find stated in the references? All the information seems to be matching with a given source.

Final Article:

Male Separatism:

Male separatism is status quo — from petty public space (Manspreading on the train! Catcalling!) to the highest halls of power (scant representation of women in government and industry). This means that feminist separation is rebellion — women excuse ourselves from “institutions, relationships, roles, and activities which are male-defined, male-dominated, and operating for the benefit of males and the maintenance of male privilege.”

And here’s the really important part: “This separation being initiated or maintained, at will, by women [emphasis original].” It’s not about advocating for an island of lesbians cut off for eternity from half the human race (OK, I wouldn’t turn it down, but I’ll admit it’s not practical), rather, it means we say when the walls go up and for how long, who passes through the gate and who waits outside.

These couple of paragraphs are stating there is male separatism along side female separatism. Overall this not just about banishing males and having a world of just females but having females have control of situations and that we get to say no or yes in any situation. It is up to us women what we want from males or what we don't want from them. (this will be starting a new topic in the article)

Radical Feminism:

One particularly infamous group is called Trans-Exclusionary Radical Feminists (TERFs), or as they call themselves, “gender-critical feminists.” Their brand of women-only feminism requires the exclusion of trans* women, on the basis that trans* women are really men. TERFs believe that since gender is socially constructed, to acknowledge non-physical psychological differences between men and women is to support patriarchy. This leads them to exclude trans* people from their movement, claiming things like “a mutilated male body is not a female body” and that transgenderism supports rape culture. The Southern Poverty Law Center classifies TERFs as a hate group. t

This paragraph can help contribute to the radical feminism paragraph. This section of the article is a little short and I thought it would be interesting to add in one of the groups of radical feminism that have existed. The TERFs are not ideally the group people want to be part of because there is so may things that they do that go against the idea of feminism or that may contract what feminism is all about.

Feminist Men:

The Problem With 'Feminist Men', overall talks about a New York state attorney general who is living a double life about the concept of feminism. The article states, "At home, it seems, Mr. Schneiderman was a sexual sadist and manipulative misogynist. At work, he was a champion of women’s rights, investigating potential charges against Harvey Weinstein, appearing at events supporting reproductive freedom, and even writing a bill specifically to punish the same kind of strangulation he is said to have forced on some of his partners." There are men who support feminism for real, not just in the public eye. As women we have to do the proper research and be conscious about who we believe to be a feminist man and be careful with trusting them.

The #MeToo movement allowed conversations to be talked about sexual harassment and assault and was indeed held by men that were accountable for behaviors like that. it encouraged meant to start speaking out in solidarity for women. But unfortunately sometimes what men say will contradict what they mean.

One of the goals of feminism is empowerment. Women should have the same power as men, all types of women. If feminists men just want to women to let them know that they are better than them and can be more successful than them, then they really shouldn't be feminists because they are missing the point.

Separatist Feminism Organization:

Modern separatist feminism began with an organization called Cell 16. Cell 16 laid the groundwork for lesbian separatism (which includes both homosexual women and heterosexual “political lesbians”). This is short blog trying to get the point across that people in the feminist community should not be afraid to question anything said by a feminist. Come ready to ask questions from research, so then as a feminist community you can draw conclusions and support each other for fighting for gender equality.

Summary of Additions:

The changes I have made to my first draft would be two new citations to the feminist men and adding a separatist feminism organization citation. Adding these aspects will hopefully improve and help the wikipedia cite get a better understanding of an aspect on feminist men and if they are telling the truth about what they believe and also and organization that kinda of started it all.