User:Ccurry24/Learned helplessness/Gsims99 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ccurry24


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ccurry24/Learned_helplessness?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Learned helplessness

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think what you have had added specifically to the depression section of your article is great so far. I would suggest however to try to avoid using direct quotations when possible and try to paraphrase it in your own words. You also have a grammar error near the start of your addition to the "depression" section:

"According to Steven Maier states that a model of depression could be caused by".

I think if you started the sentence off like this: "Steven Maier states" instead of "According to Steven Maier", it would flow a lot better! I personally feel like it sounds awkward with you saying "according to" and "states" so close together.

For the info you added to the "Later experiments" section, I do not know if that should be included. I personally do not think it adds anything to the article to cite something that had no significant findings. I do think the "Later experiments" section is lacking however, especially compared to the "Earlier experiments" section so I think you were on the right track trying to find some research for that area. If you could find some research with some significant findings, it could really benefit that section!