User:Ccurry24/Learned helplessness/Irvingca Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ccurry24


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ccurry24/Learned_helplessness?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Learned helplessness

Evaluate the drafted changes
The content of the changes that have been made is all relevant to the topic; however, there is still more that could be added throughout the article. The lead section of the article could use a little tweaking in order to better reflect some of the changes made. All of the added content properly reflects the current understanding of the topic. There are no points throughout the draft that I feel any kind of bias. the topic seems fairly uncontroversial. The sources that are used are all secondary sources and they are current sources; however, addressing the sources frequently by name can interrupt the flow of some of the information in the article. Using a citation should cover having to address the article by name. Some of the added content could use some syntax rearrangement; some of the sentences just don't flow like they could and take a second read some of the time. Nonetheless, the changes are organized very well and each addition reflects the topic and its associated subtopic.