User:Ccurry24/Learned helplessness/Jacob k 2022 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ccurry24


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ccurry24/Learned_helplessness?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Learned Helplessness

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

- The lead has not been edited

Content

-Ccurry has made good contributions to their article over a few different sections. They also bring in some information with sources as recently as 2021. However, I feel that more information could be found for the later experiments section to help bolster it a little more.

Tone and balance

- Overall the content contributed is rather neutral and does not seem to lean to one side of the spectrum.

Sources and references

-All of the sources added in seem to be functioning good links. However, citations 2 and 3 need to be fixed so the data value errors can disappear. Also, one more item of note is that the links take you to the cite, where you must then obtain access to the information. I am unsure if it is possible to gain access then directly link that into the citation instead.

Organization

- The organization seems to closely follow the original article. This should make it easier to add the new information into the article.

Images and media

-no images or media.

Overall impression

- I believe the content added has improved the article overall by filling in more missing information. In addition, the edits use more up-to-date information to help further prove the validity of the provided information. However, while there have been improvements, they can still be improved. I would say that there could be more information available to add on under the Extensions sections and possibly Emergence under torture sections. While I could be wrong, I think more information is floating around to help bolster each section.