User:Ccurry24/Learned helplessness/Seganey Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

ccurry24


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ccurry24/Learned_helplessness?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Learned helplessness

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

-       The lead has not been edited by this author.

Content

-       The content is up to date and necessary for the flow of this article. It adds new information to the pre-existing writing, but is still necessary. The only advice I have here is to work on the wording so that is is a bit smoother for the reader.

-     The content looks great but I would explain who Maeir is. Also try to use other sources not just Maier.

Tone and Balance

-       The content is neutral. The writer seems to be leaning toward one source (Maier), but the information itself is neutral in tone. I think that adding a couple more sources will clear the sense of leaning towards Maier’s information up, though.

-   As said by another peer review editor find other sources that aren't leaning towards just Maier.

Sources and References

-       The references listed are all relevant. The links work and take you to the appropriate page/website. The content added by this author does match up with the sources themselves. I also agree with Dr. Rahn about explaining who Maier is so that the reader can know that you found a reliable source with valid information.

Organization

-       The organization of the edit works well with the layout of the existing article, but I am getting a bit lost with the wording. I think like Dr. Rahn said in her comment, and something I have to work on in my own draft, there needs to be less quotations. I think in this case it is just getting a little convoluted.

Images and Media

-       This edit does not include any images or media.

Overall impressions

-       I think that overall, the edits on this article are good. The main take away (which I am working on myself, so you’re not alone) would be to work some more with your use of quotations. I think that you are using important and relevant information that will help the existing article grow.