User:Ccustodi/Grignard reaction/Moya.priroda Peer Review

General info
User:Ccustodi
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Ccustodi/Grignard reaction - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Grignard reaction - Wikipedia

Lead
There is no lead that I can see in the draft, but the current version of the article has a lead that provides concise information about the Grignard reaction. It is a bit disorganized: the pictures don't fit in and create a huge blank space.

Content
The "Other reactions using Grignard reagents" comfuses me a bit. After reading the title, I would expect to read about other reactions, when in fact, the information about controversy in defining a Grinard reaction follows. Then, different types of reagents (not reactions) are discussed. I would suggest to rename the section and move the "definition" part into a separate seaction. Also, I think it it better to include a citation after the first paragraph.

Tone, Balance and Organization
The language used is concise, however, it might be hard to follow in some paragraphs. It looks a bit more like an essay at this stage with all the introductory and linking words. I would suggest editing it and making it sound more clear and straighforward. It might be useful to look at already existing Wikipedia pages to catch that tone that Wikipedia is primarily written in.

Sources and References
The sources look relible, up-to-date and are mostly cited properly. There is some weird formatting in the end of the references, but I think it is just a minor mistake as it is a draft. I would suggest to make sure that every mantioned fact is supported by a source. Like I have mentioned above, the sentence "However, some chemists understand the definition to mean all reactions of electrophilic molecules with Grignard reagents" sounds like it is a fact taken from somewhere, so it needs to be cited. Also, this sentence is and example of unclear language I mentioned earlier. I suggest the author to make sure they edit the phrasing when polishing their article for final publication.

Images and Media
No images at this stage, but some titles implying that the author is planning to add some figures. Hope it goes well because I think for this topic, visual aids are very important and useful.

Overall Impressions
The author did a great job in elaborating on an already exiting article that is highly significant in organic chemistry. For future work, I suggest to add some visual aids and work on the language and style of writing to make it look more like a Wikipedia/scientific article and less like an essay. Good job!