User:Cdmnt/Minor Feelings: An Asian American Reckoning/Fpen333 Peer Review

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Cdmnt


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The lead is very long. It is unclear what exact part is the lead, as there are three paragraphs in the first section. The first paragraph could act as the lead, since it addresses what the book is about and explains that it is composed of the nine different essays, which the body of the Wikipedia page goes on to explain more about. The other two paragraphs at the beginning could be put into another subheading, as they work to summarize the book and therefore could have their own section.

The other headings could also be more clear. The main section is the content section, which then has different subheadings for each essay. I am not sure if you intended to do all nine essays, or just the most important ones, but there are currently six subheadings and only two which have been written about. Maybe consider rethinking the way the headings and subheadings are organized, and instead include headings such as a general summary, themes, or importance of the book. It might not be necessary to have each essay included as a subheading, since that is a lot of content to do a summary of each. If you think it is still necessary to include each essay, maybe try sticking to a few main points for each section. Your other sections, such as Reception and Influences could also be interesting, if you decide to take out the part about each essay, then you could just have a general summary and the reception and influences sections. I think you would benefit from writing about the influence and reception, as the reader would then be able to know why this book is of significance. We know what it is about and that it tackles important subjects, but what makes it stand apart from other novels? Who has deemed it important? Did it win awards?

The content itself is very well written and from a neutral perspective. It does a good job being direct and informing the reader about key points and themes throughout the novel. There are a large diverse variety of citations being used from reputable sites, that help to back up the content. All of the links function and lead to the designated sites. The grammar is also very good but there are a couple run-on sentences that you could shorten to be more concise and help get your point across. Overall, a very interesting piece and I look forward to reading it once it's done!