User:Cebeck/Magmatic water/Rsvetlov Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cebeck


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Cebeck/Magmatic water


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Magmatic water

Evaluate the drafted changes
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To start off, you are adding a lot of good content that dives into physical geology with an emphasis on chemistry and that is awesome! I like that you broke up each section into their own paragraph. Your sources look on point when it comes to peer-reviewed/secondary sources, I see journals from geochemistry, earth science, planetary science, volcanology, geothermal, institutions, and nature science journals. Only two seem not peer-reviewed like the definition pages but I think that helps you define some terms and I would keep those 2 refences (definitions.com and Encyclopedia Britannica [which can be peer-reviewed depending on the topic]). You have lots of other links, nice.

Composition: Good expansion of into into magmatic water.

Write out Volatile Organic Compound with VOC in parentheses once in the beginning just to be concise and then abbreviate later.

Your figure is amazing, on point!!!! Remember to reference the figure properly, it would be figure 1 I presume, since there are no previously attached images in the not-so-great published version. I am sure you will do that later.

I like how you said rocky planets making readers connect these processes to other planetary eruptions!

Volatiles: I would recommend linking as many things as you can maybe even several times, I don't know if you need to if you've done it once, but it wouldn't hurt.

Basaltic Magma: write out wt.% at least once and link it; also expand on what that means because it may be confusing to readers who do not have much chemistry knowledge.

Rhyolitic Magma: Link to other pages especially for the volcanoes that you mention and their locations. I love how you connect it to specific volcanoes around the world. yay! A very enjoyable read I would say!

Water in Silicate Melts: Maybe add a sentence or two on Keq for a better understanding or link the page that it explains it.

Final notes: Great expansion on the topic, it makes the article for enjoyable to read and makes readers, at least for myself, to be intrigued and be even more curious about magmatic water. Great job.