User:Cecemoseley/Mounir Fatmi/ThirdBrownEye Peer Review

In the opening paragraph did you mean: “He is particularly interested in the idea of death AS the subject of consumption.” ? I saw mostly grammatical errors such as "a dead language, OR political movement". In the last lines rather than shed light on our doubts, fear, and desires, reveal may be a better alternative. Who is the "our" you're specifically referring to-society, the public, individuals, etc.? Fatmi should always be capitalized. Please review in areas it's not. Heavier than words, words should be capitalized unless that is exactly how the exhibition is titled. In your last paragraph "certainly complex and at times twisted" may be a biased statement. ThirdBrownEye (talk) 13:56, 9 April 2023 (UTC)

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