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1. Lead: The first sentence is a run-on sentence. Although it defines congenital blindness well, this should be updated for clarity. This portion also references the East African Journal of Ophthalmology from a 2008 paper. We will look into more current reviews. The lead also mentions gene therapy, but it does not include a source. It also calls gene therapy a cure; however, this needs to be verified. The word "cure" is a non-specific and emotionally-loaded word that should be changed. Additionally, the definition of "postnatal" needs to be revised in accordance with the WHO definition. The last portion of the lead should be furthered with separate epidemiology and treatment sections.

2. Causes: The prenatal section needs to be more than just a list. Some of the sources are also from more than 20 years ago and need to be updated. The postnatal section uses heavy science terms and can be simplified for accessibility to a wider audience. The images used for this section do not add any real value as the images are not referenced or explained in the greater text. The sources for this section should be updated to a systematic review.

3. Diagnosis: We will update to the American spelling for words like pediatrics. We will also define or link an explanation for some of the more technical terms like colomba and aniridia. The last sentence also requires a source and we should expand the information on diagnosing pregnant women and genetic testing. Furthermore, more inclusive language should be used in mention of gender.

4. Gene Therapy Treatment: We will update this section to a more comprehensive research section that includes more current research. This section also includes mention of gene therapy that directly contradicts what is stated in the lead.

We hope to add the following sections based on the systematic reviews that we find. These section are as follow: Signs & Symptoms, Pathophysiology, Causes, Diagnosis, Prevention, Treatment, Epidemiology, History, Research

Sources to be used include PCORI, Cochrane, AHRQ, WHO, and National Level Health Guidelines. Some grammatical errors were already edited directly into the article sandbox. All members contributed equally to this assignment for small group session #1.