User:Celiathestrawberry/Feminist pornography/T.o.wgs Peer Review

Lead:

I suggest creating and including a topic sentence that briefly hits all of your points throughout your work to set the tone / let the reader know what is in store for them. Maybe also include a sentence that starts the work you've done describing what porn consumption is.

Content:

I think you're set on content. I find the (footnotes) resources included after points very helpful and professional looking.

Tone and Balance:

It comes off as a bit feminist opinionated, but I think that is your point? Please correct me if I'm wrong. I think you're trying to get across the point of porn being male dominated, having a negative stigma against women viewing it and why it shouldn't. Overall the tone isn't bad, but it does have a feminist perspective. Again that might be necessary to describe your information.

Sources and References:

I think your sources and references are plentiful and good for this topic. Down on the reference list it shows all of your references as "GVSU Central Login Service" and I wonder if that will present any problems for people accessing the resources who don't have a GVSU login. Wondering if there is a way to change that. You have a range of sources from different dates, but I see one is from 2020 - so I think that is 'new' enough / presents recent and relevant information.

Organization:

I think each section / paragraph of your work flows into each other. I think switching around the organization of the last paragraph solely to present the information of 'facet of feminist pornography' first might work more to make it more concise.

Overall:

I think this addition to the Wiki page is great. I think some small tweaks I mentioned could make it even better. Great work.

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