User:Celinaseguin/Choose an Article

Article Selection
Please list articles that you're considering for your Wikipedia assignment below. Begin to critique these articles and find relevant sources.

Option 1

 * LaSalle, Ontario
 * Article Evaluation
 * Lead Section: The lead section is quite long. The content in the lead could be divided into sections within the contents of the article. For example, information about the Strawberry Festival could be included in a section called 'traditions' or 'festivals.'
 * Content: There are a lot of unnecessary commas. The article can be revised to improve the clarity and succinctness of sentences. In addition, a link to the town's website could be provided. I would also add a section that is specific to culture and recreation. I also noticed that the article indicated the Vollmer pool is 'olympic size' which it is not. There are two pools in Lasalle; one pool is located at the Vollmer Complex and another is an outdoor pool on Front Road. Information about the Turtle Club, a local baseball club could be included alongside information about the new facilities for baseball around the Vollmer Complex. Additional recreational facilities include a: skatepark, amphitheater, soccer fields, baseball diamonds, and splash pad. A section could also include the wildlife that is common to Lasalle, specifically the Eastern Massasaugas Rattlesnake which is listed as an endangered species.
 * Sources and References: Claims such as "attendance to both is relatively close in numbers" does not have a link or reference. The sentence needs to be more specific with evidence to support it.
 * Images and Media: More images can be shown. Images such as the Vollmer Complex, Town Hall, or the Front Road riverfront could be added to increase its visual appeal.


 * Sources
 * https://www.lasalle.ca/en/index.asp '
 * https://lasallesabres.com/
 * https://sites.google.com/wecdsb.on.ca/lasallestompers/home
 * https://www.placespeak.com/en/topic/6391-lasalle-small-coast-waterfront-experience/#/overview

Option 2

 * Tsuda Umeko
 * Article Evaluation
 * Content: The age of Umeko when she left Japan to study abroad for the first time needs to be double checked (age 7 not 6). More information as to the reasoning behind Umeko's dissatisfaction with the hierarchical system upon her return to Japan could be outlined. Primarily, the shift in power from the Tokugawa to the Meiji, along with the government's decision to not focus on the individual development for women in higher education. Instead, there remained a focus on maintaining the class system. In addition, more insight into the political situation surrounding Umeko's decisions could be provided, or links to articles that could provide more information. There are also inconsistencies in referring to Tsuda Umeko as Tsuda, Tsuda Ume, and Tsuda Umeko. In most scholarly articles, she is referred to as Umeko.  Information about why she was Christian could be important. Christians were not widely accepted in Japan at the time so it may not be easy to understand why a Japanese woman was Christian. Provide insight to her living situation in the United States, not being surrounded by Japanese people or culture.
 * Tone: The article is neutral.
 * Sources
 * https://www.researchgate.net/publication/342756757_Umeko_Tsuda_a_Pioneer_in_Higher_Education_for_Women_in_Japan

Option 3

 * Penalty (ice hockey)
 * Article Evaluation
 * Content: I would add a description of the signals for each of the penalties.
 * Images and Media: Images of referees signalling specific penalties could be included.


 * Sources
 * https://www.chicagowolves.com/gameday/hockey-101/penalties-and-signals/

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