User:Celinaseguin/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
(Provide a link to the article here.)Cheesecake

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
(Briefly explain why you chose it, why it matters, and what your preliminary impression of it was.)

I chose to evaluate this article as I found it on the C-class list. As part of the food and drink category, this article is important in providing information about the variations of cheesecakes from different cultures. My preliminary impression of the article was that the order of the topics appeared to have a good flow.

Evaluate the article
(Compose a detailed evaluation of the article here, considering each of the key aspects listed above. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what a useful Wikipedia article evaluation looks like.)

Lead Section: The lead sentence could be revised to be more specific. It appears to be dependent on the rest of the lead section to provide the clarity that could be condensed into an introductory phrase. The lead section also does not include an overview of the article's major sections. Instead, it details the ingredient variations that are common in cheesecakes without including information about history, classifications, or national varieties.

Content: The information in the article is all relevant to the topic. However, in the national varieties section, it is possible that not all varieties are represented. It is not clear if there are more variations that could be included.

Tone and Balance: The article is written in a neutral done. However, there are instances where the voice becomes more informal. The article also makes many uses of the term 'most' which can be problematic if not sourced properly. For example, claiming it is one of the "most popular desserts in Poland" without proper citations or evidence to support the statement.

Sources and References: The links to some of the resources are not updated, leading to a page without the information cited. In addition, most of the references are not scholarly or based on literature. Instead, most are to cooking websites that are not always reliable. I would suggest updating links and searching for more reliable sources that are made by well-known organizations rather than individual chef's personal websites.

Organization and Writing Quality: There are instances of run-on sentences throughout the article. I would suggest to remove sentences that have a succession of commas and replace them with periods to divide thoughts into separate sentences. In addition, sometimes a dash (-) is used in places where semi-colons can serve the same function. Overall, the quality is satisfactory, but I would also recommend improving the formal nature of the writing to create a more neutral tone.

Images and Media: All images are relevant to the topic. The images are also well-captioned with labels that clearly indicate what is in each image. However, the images could be distributed more equally throughout the article instead of putting most at the end gallery. This would improve the visual aesthetic of the overall article. In addition, in the national varieties section, more images could be used to show an example of each variation.

Talk Page Discussion: The talk page shows discussion about the difficulty of classifying different cheesecake recipes into distinct groups. In addition, there appears to be debate over the lack of specificity in the article.

Overall Impressions: The article is the the c-class status. The main topics of the article are strong, however the writing needs to be reviewed to be more formal and concise. Overall, the article in underdeveloped as it requires more specific details in the national varieties section to make clearer distinctions between variations of cheesecake.

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