User:Celinebean2000/Overseas Filipino Worker/Carbyb Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Celinebean2000


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Celinebean2000/Overseas Filipino Worker


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Overseas Filipino Worker

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Hey Celina! This is super interesting topic and much-needed on Wikipedia. You've touched on a lot of important information and you have sources for every claim which is great. If I had to pick something to be improved on, I might dive deeper into the statements you've touched on and elaborate on them more. I think some of the wording could be re-worked for clarity, especially in the first paragraph of the "Overseas Filipino Women Workers" section. If possible, you could try eliminating any direct quotes from your sources and rewrite it in your own words – this is something I'm also trying to do in my article.