User:CesFranCa11/OLES2129

The first substantial edit on the "Claude Monet" wikipedia page was made in October 2001 by User:MichaelTinker.

If I had created this article: - Would have been much more structured: Overview --> personal life/family history --> career - Would have gone into more detail about his works, specifically his different bodies of work at various points in his life and in various locations - Would have stressed his position amongst the French Impressionists - leader of the movement, inspiration to many other artists, a master at his craft - Would have given more insight into the context of his work and how he was situated in art history, as well as who influenced him e.g. Eduard Manet e.g. Impressionism: revolution in modern painting, focus on fleeting nature of light, changes in nature - Would have included examples of important work to situate Monet in his context e.g. Women in the Garden, Westminster Bridge, Waterlillies series, Haystacks etc

Changes I would make: - Language seems slightly coloquial and should have a more objective tone: "His father wanted him to go into the family business but Claude wanted to paint". --> Could be revised to "Despite pressure to enter the family business, Monet pursued the fine arts." - Personal life, career, family history are not specified in categories - seems haphazard, I would organise these to make the article flow