User:Cfellowss/Deaths of Dhal Pothwi Apet, 17, and Lueth Mo, 15/Emichiang Peer Review

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Cfellowss / Anais Mejia
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Lead
The lead includes an introductory sentence that clearly describes the Deaths of Dhal Pothwi Apet and Lueth Mo, their age, their parent's background, and most importantly, who were they shot by. It also describes the topic of the article with other details such as what's happened and subsequent reactions from the public. I do think it is a little bit overly detailed with redundant words that can be reduced, but overall is a good start for the lead!

Content
The content is up-to-date, and many of the references you've added to the article are all from this year or the past year. All of the content so far isn't missing or doesn't belong.

The article did address topics related to underrepresented populations/topics such as both victims being teenage blacks or the controversy over improper sheriff enforcement. However, the article didn't mention a lot of content related to it, and I think maybe I can add some information/sections related to it and talk about the protests and the aftermath of the dispute.

Tone and Balance
Most of the content added is neutral and isn't heavily biased toward a particular position. But in the description of John Rosello in the "People Involved" section, there's a sentence mentioned, "Rosello to work on modified duty, meaning he was not armed or in uniform." And I'm not sure what viewpoints this comes from and if this content is neutral. (is this from the article written 15 days after the incident that you are referring to?)

Sources and References
The sources are current and most of the secondary sources are reliable except there are two sources from a funeral home website ("Dhal Pothwei Apet - View Obituary & Service Information  & "Lueth D. Mo - View Obituary & Service Information  ) I'm concerned about. My suggestion is maybe to try to search for other secondary sources (news?) that are reliable to replace the information you want to cover. There are also a couple of sources all from the same author (Anne Hayes), but the sources are diverse. I checked a few links and they all work, nice!

Organization/For New Articles Only
Most of the parts are clear and easy to read. There are a couple of grammatical issues that can be fixed, so I suggested using Grammarly or another grammar check website to help improve it. Also, the article meets Wikipedia's Notability requirements with more than three reliable secondary sources that support the content.

Overall impressions
The overall article structure is on a good track, and the content added can provide the reader with what happened and some details of this case. I do think I can add more content in the "Aftermath" section with some follow-up such as what John Rosello is doing now. Did he dispose/resign? Did the victim's family succeed in the lawsuit? Also, maybe you can add the section about the public reaction, protests, and the controversy about the "black teenager" being shot by a "white male deputy sheriff."