User:Cfellowss/Deaths of Dhal Pothwi Apet, 17, and Lueth Mo, 15/Luxiiinyu Peer Review

General info
Anais Mejia, Cfellowss
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Cfellowss/Deaths of Dhal Pothwi Apet, 17, and Lueth Mo, 15
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):User:Cfellowss/Deaths of Dhal Pothwi Apet, 17, and Lueth Mo, 15

Lead:
The lead has been updated to reflect the new content, and it's great that the introductory sentence tells the audience about the entire event in a concise but comprehensive way. In addition, the lead does not appear in the content that is not expected in the article, and almost all the contents in the main sections appear in this part, except the part about the funeral. I think the content of this lead is just right, and it would be better if the funeral part could be briefly introduced later.

Content:
In the main content, the authors introduce the main characters, events and consequences of the event in an objective way, and use very good sources, which is very perfect. Another good thing is that the content length of each section is very well balanced, so that readers can read it smoothly and avoid some unnecessary troubles. The overall structure of the article is also very clear, and the reader can view all the branches of the article on the left side of the article.

But there is still room for improvement. For example, I think articles can be more informative if some pictures about the event can be added to the page. Alternatively, authors can add Wikipedia hyperlinks to regional or professional terms to avoid confusion. Overall, this draft is very good!