User:Cgabri4/Southern fiscal/Ruby stan Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(cgabri4)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cgabri4/Southern_fiscal?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Southern fiscal

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, the article has a good, clear concise language and everything is understandable. I was impressed with her sentences mostly only having the important information people would come to read about. Maybe they could add a sentence in there about what they exactly do with their bodies to change circadian rhythms, etc. It would just add a bit more understanding to the article. They could do better at ending the paragraph, make it more round out. I think I could make my paragraph more concise like theirs. I think the information was placed well in the article. Yes, I think their section is a good length and the rest of the sections are well started but more could definitely be added to them. Most are connected to reliable journal articles. There are a variety of articles so it does not lean heavily on one of them.