User:Chainthasher/Psyren/Mariamoo333 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Chainthasher


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Psyren


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:

-         It looks like there’s a whole section about to be inserted specifically about PSI. The article doesn’t have this information yet, so I assume it’s to wait for the green light to move forward.

-         There are descriptions of various PSIs, from Hybrid to Advanced. There is also an entire paragraph that includes the Production and Development. These are less in the Plot and introduction and more into the body of the article.

Content:

-         Yes, the content is relevant to the topic. The references look like they are from the actual manga, which is a reliable source within itself; the last source is an interview with the creator, which is reliable as well.

Tone & Balance:

-         It is neutral content, though the Production’s development paragraph looks a little unfinished. That’s okay, though—there is a lot of complete sentences that are not close paraphrases. There’s no persuasion—it is completely neutral.

Sources & References:

-         The sources are the books themselves along with a mini interview. Though this is a niche manga, I would still look into other anime and manga-related websites that might have some helpful links. Hopefully there are some websites that can be translated from Japanese to English?

Organization:

-         The content is well written and easy to read. It is neatly broken down into sections that reflect on major points of the article as well.