User:Chairomai/Autoimmune skin diseases in dogs/Addiekni Peer Review

General info
Chairomai
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Chairomai/Autoimmune_skin_diseases_in_dogs?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Autoimmune skin diseases in dogs

Evaluate the drafted changes
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I thought the added information was really well written and fit with the flow of the section. In the sentence "Another type of autoimmune skin disease which can occur in dogs is vitiligo," I think vitiligo is a disease on its own rather than a type of disease, so I think it might sound better if it was just "another autoimmune skin disease..." I thought the second section did a good job of explaining a complex topic quickly and in a way that was easy to understand.