User:Chairomai/Autoimmune skin diseases in dogs/Ellackimbrough Peer Review

General info
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 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Chairomai/Autoimmune_skin_diseases_in_dogs?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think this is a good start in composing a solid sandbox draft. There is a good reference list going and I think the beginning the article body is overall complete. I think there could be more detail added after the symptoms of autoimmune disease in dogs. I personally prefer to read shorter and simpler sentences that break down difficult or complex processes, therefore, I think the intro information on the immune system and its functioning parts is important. I suggest continuing this in the draft as more information is edited in. To add more depth to this article, compare and contrast to autoimmune disorders in humans could highlight specific aspects of the dog's responses to disease.