User:Chaiteaboba/Memphis Group/JoiaD20 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Chaiteaboba


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Chaiteaboba/Memphis Group


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Memphis Group

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead: Although all the info needed for the lead section is found within the sections you have provided, I feel like I am missing that quick summary of the Memphis group as a whole, not just the individuals. The first two sentences of the "Background" section serve as a great example of what I mean.

Content: A great amount of content!

Tone and Balance: Perfectly neutral.

Sources and References: Links are fine, need to add a heading labeled "References" before the list of sources.

Organization: I feel like there are a few sentences that belong in another section. In the "Designers" section, "After Memphis'....Memphis' original work." should be at the end of the "Background" section.

Images and Media: The image of Ettore Sottsass should be next to the "Designers" section to put a face to the name, and maybe think of putting images for the other members of the group as well in the same area. Or at least include links to the Wiki pages for each member. The Memphis furniture image should be next to the "Impact" section for visual reference of what is being described.